lea zakariaei
ESL11A
SEC#2064
Journal # 4
I want describe about the product import to my country like “ NESTLE” company . this product made in Switzerland on 1905 Swiss milk company for milk product . After some years the company made another product that’s including Chocolate, Confectionery , Baby food , Bottle water , Coffee , Ice cream , Food seasoning and Pet foods .This company make organic food which as a good taste like the chocolate I like the chocolate but I like to eat the chocolate made NESTLE because have a lot of taste like milky, dark chocolate , with nuts and more .This product import to my country from Switzerland also USA . The product when was coming the most of people wants that because First , the people for morning they don’t want to waste the time for making tea or coffee with coffee maker or something else . This product it’s save the time for every time because the product it’s ready to drink or eat and you don’t want to make it and waste your time .Second , this product it’s KOSHER and like most of the people can drink and eat that . Finally , people like this product for good food because NESTLE made organic food on March 13, 2008 for people who don’t want use non organic and good taste .
1 comment:
1. DESCRIBE + object, NOT describe about (not English)
2. Does each sentence begin with a capital letter?
3. Another means ONE other. How can there be several products listed when you say "another?"
4. Check every clause for subject verb agreement.e.g. This company make organic food." This product it’s save the time for every time"
"this product it’s KOSHER "
5. My biggest suggestion to improve your writing, Lea, is to circle the subject and underline the verb in each clause to make sure they match. ALSO,please think about what you want to say IN ENGLISH. DO NOT think about it first in Farsi and translate.
6. Please save as a word doc, print out a hard copy, make corrections and repost.
:)
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